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Lady of Fire

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: The Story, The Song, and The Picture (prolouge)

    Most people said what I was going to say. Darn, but at the say time yay! More nice and praising for you! :D I love this piece, you grab the ...

    Jun 15, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Goodbye, Ryan: My First Love

    This is a touching story. I am sorry however, to hear that it is true. Break ups are hard and sometimes you still hurt. However, writing like this is a ...

    May 17, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Silence

    I like this story. I love how she talks to Oliver only for the reader to find out she was talking to his grave. Very creative. I would however, would ...

    May 17, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Kiss of an Enemy

    its very well written and u leave it at a very well written clifhanger. that gives u room to continue Emma's entry or you could write the entry from Casey's ...

    Jan 3, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Eyes of the Empire Chap. 1

    *blink* *blink* this...was...AWSOME!!! this is soo good!! no not good AWSOME!!! the way you merged the prolouge and the first chapter together was great. the only thing i have to ...

    Jul 22, 2008
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: English Skies

    woah, that was unexpected. a tragic romance and one like i have never read before. i wonder if he knew he was going to die and that is why he ...

    Jun 9, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 2

    this is really good. i can tell that Sophie is scared of her past and what is to come. the only thi i have to correct is: Carmen has all ...

    Jun 7, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 1

    these is really good. I only have one thing to correct: And I sling a friendly over his shoulder a friendly what? i was alittle confused by that. other than ...

    Jun 6, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Lovely Waters #1

    This was really good, just a few things though: I felt him open his mouth and quickly kneeled down to hug his little sister. How can you feel someoe's mouth ...

    Jun 6, 2008
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Nevermind

    This is really good. i just have a few things. 1) In the kitchen, Johnson scooped up piles of mush onto trays with a ladle There sould be a period ...

    Jun 6, 2008
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Nevermind

    i think you should keep the story in thrid person. but that's not my call. anyways, this was very good. i just wished you put in more about Tanner. like ...

    Jun 3, 2008
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Nevermind

    This was really good but i'm a little confused about this one part: He turned to the dogs who were coming closer and closer. They bound toward him with eagerness ...

    Jun 3, 2008


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